Life's short and i'm smoking it away,
who gives a dammn, i'm dying anyway,
slowly, painfuly, in this godforsaken ghetto
breath by breath, blow by blow
the red glow at the tip of my fingers
is the only thing alive, where gloom lingers
twisted in agony, by mandatory sacrifice
from the ashes, will a phoenix rise?
with my soul at stake, the dice rolls
in the fabric of reason, there are gaping holes
with every puff, a fleeting moment of bliss
what's the use,life has lost it's fizz
my bastion of principles, is riddled with holes
betrayed by society, compromised by moles
i fight a lost battle, to retain my hold
my soul haunts me, stand up for what you think, be bold.
i envy them, who traded their principles,
for gems, jewels and glittering metals
they live in comfort, oblivious of the world
for it was their soul they sold
i pity them too, for that's not life
measely cogs, in the mechanized strife
die or be tied to a yoke,
death i choose, and so i smoke
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9 comments:
Never knew my friend was in sucha pain! Brilliant, but still don't smoke yourself away!
Good one but somehow the emotions are being overshadowed by the use of strong words.Try mellowing it down a bit. At a coupla places the meter didnt quite sit properly but then its rather inconspicuous.
overall: you can write better(and on better topics)
P.S.: Actually its easy being a critic. Truly Speakin, it was much better than any poem i have ever written!
Hi Aneesh!
I came to know abt your blog through Vinod.
This poem came to me when i needed it most. Thank you.
Awesome piece n so bloddy damn true ..
(hope u dont have a copyright .. am using it as my status msg ;) ..) ..
Dude you must use creative common license. Here is a pointer
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Creative_Commons
By far, the best poem I've read on your blog! Awesome! :)
wow! nobody who smoked ever justified it d way u did! nice poem!
hey bro i think i was the first to listen it on air from u.
i repeat my words again that i expressed that day your best composition till date.
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